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Sofia

As Jarrah lay dying she couldn’t help but reflect on how she’d come to be here, to end her life so far from the Sun Village.


Surprised What a way to start a story!

Wow, I really, really like this! :D I actually feel like you and I have some of the same writing style, Sofia - if you don't mind me saying so. :) Jarrah's courage appeals to me, and the way you portray her, she's just the type of female character that I adore. I can't say that I have anything to point my fingers at here; the course of the prologue is just right.

As I read it, I wouldn't have minded a little dialogue during the birth scene, though, but as soon as I was yanked back into the 'now' and Jarrah dying, I realized that it wasn't necessary.

Good job! Please keep it coming, 'cause I'll be sure to keep reading. :D