Kind of old, but I can finally address something:
The faces for some reason bother me, the shading - the hash marks on the cheeks? Why? They all look either like they've got a LOT of makeup and it's running, or they've all been blushing/been bruised. More delicate shading if you're going to ink the hatching, is in order there.They're contour lines. There's a slight gap (on both humans and elves) beneath the bottom of the eyeball and the bottom edge of the eyesocket, but if you draw that as a normal line, characters look like they've been punched repeatedly in the face and/or haven't slept for days. Hatching, done right (which I haven't always done), is a more subtle way of showing depths.