It's all good if you're not much of a writer. I wasn't when I began RPing around ten years ago. Now, I may not be the best but I have worked on it and my language skills have picked up considerably. Almost to the point where I might just get an English degree instead of History. That aside, the character is good and introduces who he is enough that I can sorta see him. But yeah, you can always come back and polish or use him as a reference when dancing in the world of Two Moons. High Ones know, we could always use a new member of the tribe or a new way of knowing older faces [Greyvine is just another side of me after some inspiration wormed its way into my head while Redmane's most of my basics from back in the day, for instance].